tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post8788394097698365807..comments2023-08-16T07:15:32.801-04:00Comments on BookingIt: Eliminating WordinessJessica Nelsonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comBlogger43125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-43973262845367137592009-07-15T21:45:41.734-04:002009-07-15T21:45:41.734-04:00Well Jessie,
You tightened those pretty well! LOL!...Well Jessie,<br />You tightened those pretty well! LOL!Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-47821393243853727912009-07-15T21:44:56.617-04:002009-07-15T21:44:56.617-04:00Thanks Genny. I try to find helpful stuff. :-)Thanks Genny. I try to find helpful stuff. :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-19826245833956974332009-07-15T14:41:59.534-04:002009-07-15T14:41:59.534-04:00See Jane pluck. Dog drinks and falls. Rrring. Ever...See Jane pluck. Dog drinks and falls. Rrring. Everlasting happiness. <br /><br />But really, wordiness is my downfall, so I found out at my last crit group. I'm excited to see what advice you have on tightening.Jessie Oliveroshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06232456334069794107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-22538941007355789222009-07-15T11:33:36.154-04:002009-07-15T11:33:36.154-04:00Jessica,
I love the writing tips/info you share he...Jessica,<br />I love the writing tips/info you share here. Always great to stop by!Gennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05977090214116084952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-30120615294846545752009-07-15T07:24:16.651-04:002009-07-15T07:24:16.651-04:00Wow! Good for you Kate. :-)Wow! Good for you Kate. :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-66922921991591109872009-07-15T07:23:58.725-04:002009-07-15T07:23:58.725-04:00LOL Karen! I can't imagine writing something t...LOL Karen! I can't imagine writing something that long though. Whether it was wordy or not, at least you can reach 90k with no problem.<br />Ha!Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-62537159088235545072009-07-15T07:23:12.917-04:002009-07-15T07:23:12.917-04:00Hi Jeannie,
Thank you for the nice compliment. :-)...Hi Jeannie,<br />Thank you for the nice compliment. :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-32825300771497941892009-07-14T22:41:52.566-04:002009-07-14T22:41:52.566-04:00Wordy? Me? No way. My first draft was only 150k wo...Wordy? Me? No way. My first draft was only 150k words. I don't need any help with wordiness. ;)<br /><br />Editor + The Call= :)kahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10789825860272178765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-22965534223200446432009-07-14T22:19:34.917-04:002009-07-14T22:19:34.917-04:00Oh this is a big one for me! I actually cut almos...Oh this is a big one for me! I actually cut almost 3,000 words from my MS on my last round of revisions mostly by trimming a lot of those overly wordy passages.Kate Karyus Quinnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15581176126578915929noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-79583581594464891422009-07-14T21:44:25.462-04:002009-07-14T21:44:25.462-04:00kudos on getting the blog post reposted! i thought...kudos on getting the blog post reposted! i thought that was one of the most creative posts i've ever read pertaining to writing. :)Jeannie Campbell, LMFThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13958943404601029395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-39134419529961752732009-07-14T20:19:28.176-04:002009-07-14T20:19:28.176-04:00Hi Danyelle, Terri, Karen and Jen,
Maybe we can al...Hi Danyelle, Terri, Karen and Jen,<br />Maybe we can all be wordy, huh? :-)<br /><br />Jen: You seem pretty peppy to me. :-) I bet you're a very energetic person.<br /><br />Karen: That's interesting that you work your thoughts out on paper, but makes total sense. I always kept a journal. Emotions jumble things but words can name our emotions and order them, in a way. Thanks for sharing that thought!<br /><br />Terri: I didn't think you were wordy at all when I met you! :-)<br /><br />Danyelle,<br />I'm like you. My poor mom used to despair at my moodiness. :-) Now I control it a little better. I think. LOLJessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-35191131625968193502009-07-14T18:53:05.268-04:002009-07-14T18:53:05.268-04:00Can't add any more, but these are some great e...Can't add any more, but these are some great examples that got me thinking. :) I can be wordy sometimes, just depends on the mood I'm in. :DDanyelle L.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10366276085080565870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-73179998792775424122009-07-14T16:17:36.306-04:002009-07-14T16:17:36.306-04:00I am often wordy. And since I always try to keep m...I am often wordy. And since I always try to keep my blog posts on the "shorter" side, it is not unusual for me to do lots of cutting before I publish.<br />But for me, lots of my wordiness is my own working things out. Writing helps me think - so when I have my own head figured out, cutting the words isn't too painful. *grin*Karen Hossinkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18049412644792482270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-36356702174866452912009-07-14T15:37:00.464-04:002009-07-14T15:37:00.464-04:00I try hard not to be wordy when I write--only when...I try hard not to be wordy when I write--only when I talk!lolTerri Tiffanyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07771622379178654235noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-48562618783811756512009-07-14T15:34:17.513-04:002009-07-14T15:34:17.513-04:00Jess: Thanks for the link.
This was a great cd an...Jess: Thanks for the link. <br />This was a great cd and exercise. <br />The older I get, the less wordy I become, both verbally and in writing. Takes too much energy!<br />JenJeanette Levelliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12898750484193832082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-28441854107442151432009-07-14T14:42:03.857-04:002009-07-14T14:42:03.857-04:00Hey Eileen,
I think I remember you bemoaning this ...Hey Eileen,<br />I think I remember you bemoaning this before. *grin* Don't say sadly, that's what crit partners are for. :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-19179660422019408692009-07-14T14:35:04.887-04:002009-07-14T14:35:04.887-04:00I'm terrible with wordiness. One of my crit pa...I'm terrible with wordiness. One of my crit partners is forever asking me to shut-up my words. Sadly, I don't always notice enough of my wordy sections. Looking forward to hearing what tips you got from the CD.Eileen Astels Watsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11098531184044931737noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-75884613511316925082009-07-14T12:20:15.846-04:002009-07-14T12:20:15.846-04:00Great examples Angie! I love them. Especially the ...Great examples Angie! I love them. Especially the fainting part. I wonder if anyone's ever really done that? Too funny.Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-12350156933864603032009-07-14T10:52:00.384-04:002009-07-14T10:52:00.384-04:00Jane most often likes to pluck her eyebrows in a h...Jane most often likes to pluck her eyebrows in a haphazard fashion. (Jane's eyebrows were usually in need of tweezers.) <br /><br />Lapping at his water bowl, the dog fell to the ground in an exhausted heap. (Spot lapped up his fill then keeled over.) <br /><br />She was so happy when the the call came from an editor.<br />(She almost fainted when an editor called.)Angie Ledbetterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16407006980893727627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-24604623911425711322009-07-14T10:31:58.013-04:002009-07-14T10:31:58.013-04:00Ha! We're on at the same time. :-)
LOL Love t...Ha! We're on at the same time. :-)<br /><br />LOL Love the rewrites! Oh my gosh. When I get the call my throat will be hoarse from all my screaming. And my legs sore because I for sure will look like a Mexican jumping bean! LOL<br /><br />Thanks for your funny comment. :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-72074740463290093522009-07-14T10:29:06.515-04:002009-07-14T10:29:06.515-04:00Congrats on the repost, Jessie! I'll check tha...Congrats on the repost, Jessie! I'll check that out later. <br /><br />And you know all about me and my wordiness, first hand, you trooper you. In the past, it did take the help of my crit partners but I think I've finally come to a place where I can spot the excess and tone it down on my own. <br /><br />But I'm not willing to make all of it too tight. There's the flow to consider. I now pick and choose which sentences get the extra stroke of my artist's brush, so they'll really stand out. Some of us have a lush style and it's one thing to shave it. I just don't want to labotomize it. Heh.<br /><br />Here's my rewrite of the sentences, though I decided for fun to make one SPECIAL sentence even longer. :D<br /><br /><br />Jane often plucks her eyebrows haphazardly.<br /><br />Lapping at his water, the dog slumped down, exhausted. <br /><br />(I've actually seen my labs lay down during the process of drinking if they've been running around the yard like crazy. They put their forelegs around the bowl--it's pretty comical).<br /><br />And for the BEST sentence of all:<br /><br />She bounced around the room like a Mexican jumping bean in a fiesta when the the wonderful, enthralling, LONG-AWAITED call finally came from an editor that would forever live in her mind as the HERO of all her books thereafter. *swoon*<br /><br />Snort! I think all of us can relate to that last one. Have a great day, Jessie!anitanoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-72263877334631929062009-07-14T10:28:46.949-04:002009-07-14T10:28:46.949-04:00LOL Katie!
You must have tons of bruises! Heeeheee...LOL Katie!<br />You must have tons of bruises! Heeeheee.<br />I'm looking forward to the rewrites too. :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-31788846004122337332009-07-14T10:28:06.120-04:002009-07-14T10:28:06.120-04:00Hey Mom,
You never know, you might write something...Hey Mom,<br />You never know, you might write something someday. You have the urge. I definitely think people's style changes with their mood.Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-80860819857586785462009-07-14T10:27:28.904-04:002009-07-14T10:27:28.904-04:00Thanks for stopping by Nancy! :-)Thanks for stopping by Nancy! :-)Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5429542410238239360.post-48503005238606092682009-07-14T10:27:12.319-04:002009-07-14T10:27:12.319-04:00Good for you Cindy! Printing things really helps m...Good for you Cindy! Printing things really helps me also.Jessica Nelsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12365768876905444157noreply@blogger.com