If you all didn't know, over the holidays Agent Jessica Faust over at Bookends took pitches and randomly critiqued them. Of course I read through them and added one of my own. :-)
Some pitches were good, interesting, succinct. Some were not. And some just made my brain hurt. In all of these, a common word began to pound at my eyes.
The hero must do this. The heroine must do that. But somehow the pitches were not setup in such a way that I felt like the protagonist "must" do anything.
This is bad, but I'll confess it anyways. All those musts began to annoy me. I began to grit my teeth every time I saw one.
Lesson: Don't use must. Just say what the protagonist decides to do.
I just discovered this pet peeve, so I hope I haven't offended anyone with this post. It's only my opinion, which is only worth the value you give it. :-) Anyways, I thought you all would be interested in reading those pitches. It is a great exercise to see what works and what doesn't.
Did you read them? What stood out to you?
*I've never pitched an agent before so this is only my unprofessional opinion. I have no background in pitching at all.*