The main thing about tightening, according to Rick Steele, Acquisitions Editor for AMG publishing, is clarity.
When we tighten our story, we're not just trying to make the sentences shorter. You may recall commenter Anita claiming that her lushness is wordy. For the most part, I don't agree (sorry, dear friend). Her style of writing is lush, but the purpose of her sentences are clear. Each word adds to the story and to the sensory experience of the reader.
Loose writing is hard to follow. All those extra words, in strange orders, the meaning skipping around, commas everywhere...
Make the sentence clear, make the meaning clear.
What I got from this CD is that the sentence length is not as important as sentence impact.
When you revise and tighten, do you have a certain process, certain words/phrases you look for first? Or do you go sentence by sentence? And how do you feel about my opinion on this? Anything to add?